Friday, December 14, 2012

A convoluted sentence...

if ever there was one.

I came across this in the Times of India when editing for my nl. (The TOI has been, of late, coming up with statements that I have to pore over just to get to the kernel).


A new American Cancer Society study has revealed that people who drank more than four cups of caffeinated coffee per day were at about half the risk of death of these often fatal cancers compared to those who only occasionally or who never drank coffee.

On reading and re-re-re-reading the article as it appeared in the paper, this is finally what I got:

A new American Cancer Society study has revealed that people who drank more than four cups of caffeinated coffee per day were at about half the risk of death due to oral cancer as compared to those who only occasionally, or never drank coffee.

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